Sentence Error Assignment Sheet

Take a few minutes to try to correct each of the sentences below.  First, try to see if you can determine what might be weak in the given sentence.  Secondly, see if you can suggest a revision that might correct the weakness.  You may have to change one sentence to two, or supply words that are absent from the sentences as they are phrased.  We will be going over possible revisions in class.

1.  The entering of past people in Willy's life come with music which shows the audience that he is thinking of the past.

2.  This unawareness demonstrates that although Willy strives for the ideals of the past which his father accomplished, the natural and unalienated labour are the ideals that Willy is unable to achieve, because he lives in an urban environment and sells commodities that he doesn't produce, and is thus unaware of how to achieve his dream.

3.  In making a comparison between the time period before capitalism and commodification occurred and the time period after these societal changes, Miller demonstrates that masculinity is no longer defined solely by the physical manifest of a person.

4.   Miller asserts through the drama of the play that masculine success is through a new vehicle, the intellect.

5.  Willy's imagination is a means to avoid admitting himself as an unsuccessful salesman.

6.  A notion that by his son exceeding at football gives Willy the idea that he has not failed as a father, thus reinforcing his masculinity.

7.  Willy promotes cheating to his sons in order to further their athletic careers, by telling Bernard to give Biff the answers to an exam in school, rather than their academic careers which leads to the failure in life of both his sons.

8. The monnster feels outcasted from society.

9.  Victor and Walton do not reveal strong familiar ties.

10.  Lady Bracknell is exceptionally humorous in her interrogation of Jack, because she places value on attributes that are typically invaluable.

11. The monster is portrayed as having a strong sense of individualism.

12.  Looking one’s absolute best is also a characteristic that Mansfield uses to portray the carefree nature of the upper-class.

13.  Mansfield uses a character named Laura Sheridan to portray the development of indifference to social class to becoming very aware of those who are not in the upper class.

14.  The arrogance of the upper class is exposed for the purpose of their own condemnation.

15.  In response to Felix, she “thanked him in the most ardent terms for his intended services towards her father” (151).

16.  In the novel, Mary Shelley used Milton’s Paradise Lost to compare the monster’s life versus Adam’s life and showing the differences between both creator’s attitude towards their creation.

17.  This is also proven by the monster’s understanding of language to be a route to human being.

18.  In parallel to this fact, Sonny Bodkin is believed to have sung to Nora Joyce.

19.  Joyce tries to show Gabriel as a confused character, Gretta is more aware of what she wants.

20.  As a derivative of the progress of civilization expansionist societies were born.

21.  Caliban knows enough now to understand that he lost his freedom and realize the value of it.

22.   Meanwhile, indicating how these incidents result in personal character changes.